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Notes for Lilith -Top Words-

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God is not a Man
or a Woman;
God is our name
for the best qualities of both,
wanting to believe
that at least the intentions were good.

Love is not dead, my daughter,
not yet or ever, and anyone who says so
is a coward, or a foolish cynic.
Love is what makes us like the angels,
Daughter of Men, Daughter of Women,
and even the angels linked together atoms
to express their Love
the way we do.
Never let anyone convince you that Love is wrong,
but do not make it an excuse
to be careless.

Daughter, you were named for the seldom-mentioned First-Woman,
who, wanting an Equal, not a ruler,
left the Perfect Garden
in search of Love.
The story went on without her,
but I think she found what she was looking for,
that Someone who was the other half-soul
that God had sundered.
Daughter, never settle for a 'maybe',
for an easy, pleasing, but slightly discordant song.
Too many people do, living with okay-ness
because they are afraid
to wait for really-beautiful-ness.                        

Children die, mothers die, fathers die,
lonely people and happy people all die,
but Life continues.
All bodies become a part of the ground,
atoms remaining while the soul part goes
wherever soul parts go,
perhaps some peaceful darkness,
some deep un-knowing,
perhaps some perfecting middle ground,
some hazy Sheol,
perhaps some omniscient world of created dreaming.
Remember this
should you ever miss the dead,
remember that the 'Why?' of Death is Life:
Death is the price of Life,
and if one makes Life worth it,
they've cheated Death of any profit
and may go gently, laughing,
into that good night.

People kill people, my love, just as animals kill animals.
We are not set apart by our ability to kill
more inventively or more dispassionately,
we are set apart by our ability to mourn,
the flowers on the graves an enduring, reminder
that we
have
evolved.
Okay, so, on Facebook, I created a meme. There's that thing you can do to find your top, or most used words, right? I decided to write something using all of my top words. I challenge others to try this as well (if you do, send me the link). It makes Facebooking a little more artistically productive, no? ;)

Anyway, my top words were: Love, People, Really, Should, Song, Fact, Best, Think, Why, Life, World, Children, Let, Someone, Maybe, and God
And yes, before you say it, I did not use 'fact' because that is a hard as hell word to use in a poem, and I couldn't find a way to put it in there without making the poem blegh. 'Really', 'maybe', and 'should' were hard enough as it was. >.<

This is a poem of things I would want the daughter I may or may not have in the future to know, if I'm not there to show her. I mean, they're good for other people to know too, but I'd really want a child of mine to know.

Critique-ers/Comment-ers(:iconthewrittenrevolution: and others):
1.) Unique imagery/wording, not cliche, striking, touching, and what-not? In other words, general critique.
2.) What would you want to tell your daughter/son?
3.) What do you think of my opinions on life as I have observed it thus far? Agree, disagree, any additions?
4.) How does this poem affect you?
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Sometimes, when one tries to create a poem using a meme, or a concept, or some trick, it comes out quite badly. This is not one of those times. It is written as a letter to a daughter, but is full of beautifully written spiritual advice for anyone who wonders about God, love, and death. And perhaps it is just because my own opinions of such things fall so close to the author's, or those expressed here, but the whole thing appealed to me in a way that not a great deal of poetry does. Perhaps it is the fact that so many poems touch on such things, but this one did it in a beautiful and well-written way. I wrote, long ago, a letter to a daughter I will never have... but this poem makes me think, perhaps, that I need to touch on these subjects, in it. And perhaps I shall.